Saturday, July 9, 2011

Bedtime thoughts

Hey Everybody,

Last night I couldn't fall asleep. I was thinking about how I could make my blog Pie-News, not random thoughts. Then I thought I could maybe try writing articles. I have written an article before and I got an A. It was about a boy named Johnny and well, I have to start from the beginning. So last year over Christmas break I had to read the book Johnny Tremain, by Esther Forbes.It was a good book but I don't think I need to read it again.(it's kinda a boy's book) Anyway, later I had to write an article about something that happened in the book, for writing class. Some tips about writing articles are: The first paragraph should be all a person needs to read to understand what happened if they don't have time to read the whole thing. Second, have some quotes from people who were part of the story. (I used quotes from Paul Revere and Mr. John Hancock. Note that in the book they did say these things but not for this article.) Here is my article I hope you like it. Notice the first paragraph and quotes.

Promising Young Apprentice Burns Hand


BOSTON - Up and coming apprentice, Johnny Tremain, received a serious injury causing his thumb to be melted to the side of his right hand, at the Lapham Silversmith Shop Sunday afternoon. Such an injury has ruined his dream to be a silversmith.

The accident happened while Johnny was working on an order for Mr. John Hancock. His fellow apprentice handed him a cracked crucible as a joke to teach him a lesson. When the crucible was filled with hot silver, it broke spilling silver all over the furnace and onto the floor. Johnny slipped and put his hand on the furnace to catch himself. Unfortunately, his hand landed in the molten silver scorching it immediately.

“Just a few weeks earlier I had asked if he’d like to accompany me in my work,” stated Mr. Paul Revere. “I told him I would pay his unexpired time and that if Mr. Lapham wasn’t sure to tell him I’d pay a little more. But now that the boy is crippled, he’ll be no help to me.”

Mrs. Lapham did not call a doctor but a midwife, because she didn’t want it to be discovered that they were breaking the Sabbath. They called Gran ‘Hopper, an older woman who lives down the street.

After returning home and finding that his family had worked behind his back, Mr. Lapham melted down the creamer that they were making for Mr. Hancock.

“I never did receive the creamer that I ordered for my Aunt Lydia Hancock’s birthday.” Mr. Hancock explained with a sigh, “We did have a whole set but a clumsy maid melted the creamer.”

Johnny is still recovering, but doing well. He now delivers papers for the Boston Observer on his horse Goblin.

- 301 words -


I wrote this in February 2011. Have a great day, love you. :)

1 comment:

  1. Great job, Greta; that's really well-written! I remember reading Johnny Tremain for my Literature Class a year or two ago, and I liked it a lot. Reading this brought back a few sweet memories. =)

    Hope that you continue writing more of this!

    ~Katie C

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